Peer Review for IMRaD Paper

Please comment your review of my IMRaD paper on this post. Thanks!

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  1. UnknownOctober 29, 2018 at 10:36 AM

    Although your paper meets requirements of length and sections, I do feel that you could add more in terms of depth of the information to both your introduction and your discussion. The paper was also missing the appendix and the references pages but you've said you forgot to add those in which will be fine.

    Make sure that you clearly state the gap in the previous research and explain how your survey will fill that gap. Without clearly stating the gap, the reader is left to guess as to what it is and may misinterpret your paper/research.

    grammar overall was pretty good and I know that it is only the rough draft but just make sure that you comb through your paper to catch any little errors. Citations also need improvement because they don't reference a specific article only the very general source that it came from.

    I did really like the results and data sections of your report. I thought that they were really well done and they clearly described what the data was saying. This makes reading the report so much easier for the reader to understand.

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  2. Allie WendellOctober 29, 2018 at 10:44 AM

    Overall I thought your paper was pretty good. There are still things that could be improved on on added into your paper that could help your paper succeed.
    First, for your abstract, you need to take about why this research is important. The first two sentences in your abstract need to talk about why the study your doing is even important and including that will help your readers understand your point. Also I would suggest adding a little more information in the abstract just so it is easier for readers to understand the point you are trying to give.

    Second, for your in- text citations make sure you are writing the authors name not the website it should look like (last name, year). this will help for references.

    Third, in your intro you need to include your Gap, and you need to explain how current research already done will help you fill that gap. The gap is what is not known about this topic yet. For yours it seems like it could be what the boys at kappa sigma think about the legalization of marijuana.

    Lastly, for your discussion section I would look on the rubric because you seemed to be missing certain sections that are key for the discussion section. Just make sure your including importance, problems with the study, changed in your state of knowledge on this topic, and future research that could be done!

    Great work on the paper!

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